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[it took him 129 days to finally stop breathing without you there.]

on day 32, he bought flowers and slid them into a thin vase
on the windowsill. a petal fell off and floated to a silent rest
on the water's surface, and a single ripple weakly faded away.

he threw the flowers out that night.


on day 58, he woke from a nightmare, clawed at the pillow
your picture was on, and his fingernail snagged on the paper.
he gazed wantonly for a minute at the ragged shreds, then
promptly turned on his side and shut his eyes.

the torn-up paper drifted off into the cracks between the floors.


on day 99, he thought you came back, and he cried out in joy,
only to watch as the tears washed away the blurred image of you.
he clutched at the wadded up napkins in his hand, and teardrops
fell, blending into the many there before them.

he saw you again that night, and wished himself to wake up.


[on day 129, he lay six-and-a-half feet under the ground,
white daises scattered daintily around the freshly mounted earth.
you stood alone, in the rain and the trees, and you regretted how
you came back in time just to cry out in broken sobs.]
written for the Second Annual Poetry Screams Contest: [link]

prompt: "alone in the cemetery".

HIT 100 FAVES 1 WEEK AFTER SUBMISSION. thank you all. (:


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:iconthewrittenrevolution:: does the fact that i did not state what form of love this piece is based on help the effect of the piece?
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X-RAES Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist
oh my gosh no why :(
i love your work haha idk why i'm torturing myself by reading such heartbreaking things :P
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electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omf don't continue torturing yourself!
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Fluffy-Emo-Chan Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011
Looking through my faves out of boredom and I can't help but say just how much I ADORE this poem! It's so full of emotion :) Good job.
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electrickiss Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
aww, thanks so much! (:
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Th3Chos3nOn3 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
This is so tragically beautiful. Makes me want to cry. ;_;'
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electrickiss Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
*_______* thank you!
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little-supernova Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The last line makes the whole poem. Just sayin'.
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electrickiss Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
i'm glad you think so. ;D
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darknightforever Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
I have a question. I'm doing a project for my Audio Design class. We have to record a bit of poetry/prose and add music to it in the background and I was wondering if you would mind me using this?
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electrickiss Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
sure, if you credit me in your credits! P:
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