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we live in a world where our lungs are black and outlined with angry streaks of red. we plant diseases and destruction in the holes of our stomachs and watch them grow – they shoot up fast and clog up our throats with ashy leaves.

our fingernails are ripped, jagged edges digging into pale skin and leaving white hot lines in their wake. our wings are crumpled, feathers bent and pressing into the expanse of our backs – they're the weights on our shoulders, and there's no space left for anything else.

your tongue is cracked and so is mine. words no longer form, sounds no longer rise. dreams and wishes fall into the cracks as nightmares rush past them out into the open. that breathtaking sequel to life you were hoping for no longer exists – we are now aimless, hopeless, and craving for sin.

we swallow moons and exhale moondust; we stray from orbits and into vacuums. but all we ever wanted were the touch of lightly powdered lips against our flesh.
maybe one day i'll be back.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-01-31
~electrickiss's vivid imagery creates an intense vignette in moondust. ( Suggested by LadyofGaerdon and Featured by neurotype )
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popoilo Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013
Thank you. Honestly. This was the best thing in my day *-* I love this thing you do with words [link]
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg thank you! this means a lot <333
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:iconimaginative-lioness:
imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have featured this in my journal: [link]
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh thank you so much! :heart:
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:iconzee-who:
Zee-Who Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
much thanks! :heart:
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:iconmex-ciudadano:
MEX-Ciudadano Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
That is some strong literature.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! :hug:
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Writer
Wow. The imagery in this is beautiful! Congrats on the DD! It's well deserved!
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm so honoured you think so! :heart:
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:icondrippingwords:
DrippingWords Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Writer
:huggle:
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:iconetc-anime:
etc-anime Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is amazing... it's incredibly emotional. I can't describe how amazing this is...
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you omg it means a lot!
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:icontgiba:
TGIBA Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellently done. :)
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
/bows :')
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:icontgiba:
TGIBA Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D Thank you for sharing your work! I certainly enjoyed it. <3
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:icontheartzyowl:
TheArtzyOwl Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
This is fantastic. I love the concluding line and how it works with the tone of the rest of the poem. Fantastic work.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i'm running out of ways to say thank you! but i do thank you :'D
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:icontheartzyowl:
TheArtzyOwl Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Lol. You're welcome. xD
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:icongreenwood-wolf:
Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow...

That's amazing.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
and i thank you :'3
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:icongreenwood-wolf:
Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really, this thing is magical. You can almost taste the poison in the words.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg let me hug you till death (not really but you know what i mean!)
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:icongreenwood-wolf:
Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:iconhuggleplz:

that better?
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
very much so :'D
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:icongreenwood-wolf:
Greenwood-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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:iconmichaelhiyama:
MichaelHiyama Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow what a powerful message this conveys. You write so eloquently it's beautiful.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh my gosh, thank you so much ;A; :heart:
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:iconciuby09:
ciuby09 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
pff. such emotional.
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:iconciuby09:
ciuby09 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
i mean, i am like wow! :)
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hahah, thank you!
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:iconemiko-catonfire:
Emiko-CatOnFire Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
The imagery is great. Strong message about humanity. At least, that's what I interpret from it..
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! and yes, you would be right ;D
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:iconmissdudette:
MissDudette Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
Gotta love the visual.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:heart::heart::heart:
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:iconellen-souler:
Ellen-Souler Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very strong ending stanza wow
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :3
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:iconkcsummerz:
KCsummerz Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconcongratsdd1plz::iconcongratsdd2plz::iconcongratsdd3plz:
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
omg hahaha thank you! C:
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:icongreenleo94:
greenleo94 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow this piece is incredibly powerful. I love your word choice! :3

Also congrats on the DD! :D
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you and thank you again!
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:icongreenleo94:
greenleo94 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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:iconeiolo:
Eiolo Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013
I offer you a digital hand and hug :) In the face of infinite irrelevance, even ash can be a beautiful miracle.
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i return your hand and hug!
and i absolutely agree :3
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EternalFallacy Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Amazing, congratulations on a DD! I see both of the literary DDs today are in a very cosmic :heart:
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:iconelectrickiss:
electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much! :') :heart:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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electrickiss Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
oh gosh thank you! you too <3
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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thesquareroot Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
i enjoy the imagery and composition very much but am quite pressed to find the justification for its categorization as flash fiction or a vignette or even prose for that matter. to me (and this is just my opinion) it would be far more accurate to classify this as poetry. could you perhaps delineate on your decision?
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